Assignment #4- Thinking Critically about Revisions

My final draft looks different from my rough draft because i did all of the corrections that my peers from my peer review group told me to do. In my final draft i really fixed my paper and i organized it a little more then what my rough draft had. In my rough draft i had my ideas everywhere and it sounded like i was talking to someone instead of actually writing a paper. One of the problems that i have with writing my paper is that i tend to always repeat myself in every paragragh, and thats something that i would like to fix. The peer review giuded me to make big revisions to my paper because it was helpful that i got opinions from other people about my the problems that i needed to fix on my paper. The strongest part of my essay is the introduction and my weakest is the conclusion, thats something i would like to work on also.